Why I don\'t want to try raising animals.
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I don\'t want to try raising animals.
Because when we raise animals, our room will be dirty.
Second, when we raise animals, we should clean their excreta.
Third, we should have permission for my parents.
Lastly, we should use a lot of money for them.
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I don\'t want to try raising animals.
>> CORRECT!
Because when we raise animals, our room will be dirty.
>> That\'s because when we raise animals, our room will be dirty.
Second, when we raise animals, we should clean their excreta.
>> CORRECT!
Third, we should have permission for my parents.
Third, we should have permission for my parents.
>> Third, we should ask permission from my parents.
Lastly, we should use a lot of money for them.
>> CORRECT!
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