Why I like salty foods more.
학생이 쓴 원문
I like salty foods more than sweet foods.
That is because when I eat too many sweet foods, I have a teeth pain.
My second reason is when I have some salty foods, I have a crispy feeling.
My third reason is proper salty food is healthy for the body.
Finally, too many sweet cans might die.
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>> This is a good sentence.
That is because when I eat too many sweet foods, I have a teeth pain. Finally, too many sweet cans might die.
>> When I eat too many sweets, I get a toothache. Moreover, too many sweets can cause death.
My second reason is when I have some salty foods, I have a crispy feeling.
>> The reason I like salty foods is that they are crispy.
My third reason is proper salty food is healthy for the body.
>> Eating the right amount of salty food is healthy for the body.
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