Why I think it is important to having friends.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think having friends is important.
That is because when we have a friend, we can play with them.
My second reason is when we have a friend, they can embrace each other when we get angry.
My third reason is when we play with them, we can be happy.
Finally, we can be popular when we have a lot of friends.
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>> This is a good sentence.
That is because when we have a friend, we can play with them.
That is because when we have a friend, we can play with them.
>> That is because when we have friends, we can play with them.
My second reason is when we have a friend, they can embrace each other when we get angry.
>> When we have friends, they can embrace us when we get angry.
My third reason is when we play with them, we can be happy.
>> We can be happy when we play with them.
Finally, we can be popular when we have a lot of friends.
>> Moreover, we can be popular when we have a lot of friends.
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