why I write2

2018-06-25 · 첨삭 강사 Elisha

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finally third. It is the whole heart. 'Thre must be the reason why I write.' As I said earlier Why I write is that I want to contribute intellectual helps to human society and to be supportive even a little to people. Whenever I read the classical books, I am surrounded with awe and respect. And although I have read the <Ode to Youth(청춘예찬)> of the novelist, 민태원 and <relinquishment(단념)> of poet, 김기림 more than 10times, still now my heart pounded. This is because they have a whole heart. Suppose it is clear the reason writing and the reason is not for only myself, a power comes along in the writing and it makes reader's heart to be touched. Though my writing can't become the classical book, if just only one person read the mine and get something(knowledge,power), As doing like that the calling of my writing is to do all.

강사 첨삭

You\'re doing great, [이름]! Keep them coming! ~Teacher Elisha

finally third. It is the whole heart.

>> Finally, write wholeheartedly.

OR:

>> Finally, write with your whole heart.

 \'Thre must be the reason why I write.\'

>> There must be a reason why I write.
 As I said earlier Why I write is that I want to contribute intellectual helps to human society and to be supportive even a little to people.

>> As I said earlier, the reason why I want to write is because I want to  contribute and help the society by using my intellect and to support people even just for a little.
 Whenever I read the classical books, I am surrounded with awe and respect.

>> CORRECT!

OR:

>> Whenever I read the classical books, I feel respect towards the writers and I am left in awe.
 And although I have read the <Ode to Youth(청춘예찬)> of the novelist, 민태원 and <relinquishment(단념)> of poet, 김기림 more than 10times,
still now my heart pounded.

>>  And although I have already read the Ode to Youth(청춘예찬) by the novelist 민태원 and Relinquishment(단념) by the poet 김기림 more than 10 times, my heart still pounds.

This is because they have a whole heart.

>> This is because they wrote with their hearts.
 Suppose it is clear the reason writing and the reason is not for only myself, a power comes along in the writing and it makes reader\'s heart to be touched.

>> It is clear that the reason I\'m writing is not only for myself but also for other people because of the power that comes along with it which makes the readers\' hearts be touched.
 Though my writing can\'t become the classical book, if just only one person read the mine and get something(knowledge,power), As doing like that the calling of my writing is to do all.

>> Though my writing can\'t become a classical book, even when just a person reads what I\'ve written to get knowledge and power, I would still do something like that and give it my all because that is my calling for writing.
 




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