why is animal cruelty a concern?
학생이 쓴 원문
Commonly, It is known to be related with humon violence possibility.
Also we must know that we are not the owners of the earth and just stay in the planet a few years.
So, if we have strength power compared to the other species which is different from human,
and then we have to protect them. I think it is our responsibility.
강사 첨삭
Commonly, It is known to be related with humon violence possibility.
>> Commonly, it is known to be potentially related to human violence.
OR >> Commonly, it is believed to be potentially linked to human violence.
Also we must know that we are not the owners of the earth and just stay in the planet a few years.
>> Also, we must know that we are not the owners of the earth and just stay on the planet for a few years.
OR >> Also, we must understand that we do not own the earth and are just here for a few years.
So, if we have strength power compared to the other species which is different from human,
>> So, if we have strength and power compared to other creatures/species that are not human,
and then we have to protect them. I think it is our responsibility.
>> Then, we have to protect them. I think it is our responsibility.
OR >> Then, we must protect them. I think this is our responsibility.
>> Commonly, it is known to be potentially related to human violence.
OR >> Commonly, it is believed to be potentially linked to human violence.
Also we must know that we are not the owners of the earth and just stay in the planet a few years.
>> Also, we must know that we are not the owners of the earth and just stay on the planet for a few years.
OR >> Also, we must understand that we do not own the earth and are just here for a few years.
So, if we have strength power compared to the other species which is different from human,
>> So, if we have strength and power compared to other creatures/species that are not human,
and then we have to protect them. I think it is our responsibility.
>> Then, we have to protect them. I think it is our responsibility.
OR >> Then, we must protect them. I think this is our responsibility.
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