Why is art important?
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I think the artworks contain the history at the moments like a trend and political, social values of that time.
So we can learn history of human.
Although the art is not always positive we can learn a thinking different ways.
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So we can learn history of human.
I think the artworks contain the history at the moments like a trend and political, social values of that time.
>> I think the artworks contain the history at the moments like a trend and political and social values of that time.
So we can learn history of human.
>> So we can learn the history of humans.
Although the art is not always positive we can learn a thinking different ways.
>> Although art is not always positive, we can learn to think in different ways.
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