why is doing volunteer work important?
학생이 쓴 원문
first of all,
There are a lot of people in our society
Who are left out or in need of a helping hand, who generally cannot offered to pay.
Therefore, it is important because of volunteers provide medical care and various services without asking for any cost
the under privileged can also receive the necessary services.
In conclusion, only when it becomes a society that comes forward on its own,
only a society the develops and cooperates with each other can achieve big goal.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]-Li!
How are you today my dear?
I hope you\'re doing great. We were not able to study together last Monday and I was a bit worried.
But I know that you\'re quite busy these days so I sincerely hope that you\'re alright.
Stay healthy and safe! Take care.
See you in class later. ^_^
~Charry
first of all, There are a lot of people in our society
How are you today my dear?
I hope you\'re doing great. We were not able to study together last Monday and I was a bit worried.
But I know that you\'re quite busy these days so I sincerely hope that you\'re alright.
Stay healthy and safe! Take care.
See you in class later. ^_^
~Charry
first of all, There are a lot of people in our society
>> First of all, there are a lot of people in our society.
Who are left out or in need of a helping hand, who generally cannot offered to pay.
>> They are left out or in need of a helping hand because they generally cannot offer payments.
OR >> They are left out or in need of a helping hand because they generally cannot afford to pay.
Therefore, it is important because of volunteers provide medical care and various services without asking for any cost
>> Therefore, volunteers are important because they provide medical care and various services without asking for any costs.
the under privileged can also receive the necessary services.>> The under privileged can also receive the necessary services.
In conclusion, only when it becomes a society that comes forward on its own, only a society the develops and cooperates with each other can achieve big goal.
>> In conclusion, a society is only called one when it comes forward on its own. Only a society that develops and cooperates with each other will achieve a big goal.
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