Why is English fluency significant for you?

2023-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

학생이 쓴 원문

First, I need to english before I go to another country. I can go to travel in another country or I can have to job or working holiday in country other than korea. In order to live during work in other country, I must communicate with people, because I think it is much easier to communicate in English, which is commonly used the world. Second, In order to work in Korea, I need to have some English skills. Most korea companys are checking the English skill like Toeic or speking, and They determines if I am the right person for thier company. If I could english fluency, It might be a little advantageous for work. Finally, English is just for fun to me. I\'ve enjoyed using English since I was young. I found a english program accidental when came I university, I learned speak only english and confident. After that, I started get interested in speak to english, and I thouth that I wanted to have a foreigner friends.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this [이름]ice. Good luck with the English fluency journey. Everything is possible if you put your mind in it. Fighting!

First, I need to english before I go to another country.
>>> First, I need to be fluent in English before I go to another country.
I can go to travel in another country or I can have to job or working holiday in country other than korea.
>>> I can go travel in another country or I can have a job or working holiday in a country other than Korea. 
In order to live during work in other country, I must communicate with people, because I think it is much easier to communicate in English, which is commonly used the world.
>>> In order to live during work in another country, I must communicate with people, because I think it is much easier to communicate in English which is a commonly used language around the world.
Second, in order to work in Korea, I need to have some English skills. 
>>> correct
Most korea companys are checking the English skill like Toeic or speking, and They determines if I am the right person for thier company.
>>> Most Korean companies are checking the English skill like TOEIC or speaking, and they determine if I am the right person for their company.
If I could english fluency, It might be a little advantageous for work.
>>> If I could gain English fluency, it might be a little advantageous for work.
Finally, English is just for fun to me. 
>>> correct
I\'ve enjoyed using English since I was young.
>>> correct
I found a english program accidental when came I university, I learned speak only english and confident.
>>> I found an English program accidentally when I came to the university, I learned to speak only English and became confident.
After that, I started get interested in speak to english, and I thouth that I wanted to have a foreigner friends.
>>> After that, I started to get interested in speaking English, and I thought that I wanted to have foreigner friends.

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