Why is gender equality important?

2019-05-14 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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It can be resolved the social conflict that under the gender issues and also can help stable development of a nation. Men is existence that worth of human dignity before from origin, gender and areas. Gender equality must be taken place from base on that basic Ideology. For instance the society capacity can be developed to 100 percent by females participation if that is 50 percent by only males responsibility Therefore when both sexes participate in society justly then entire state and society capacities can be developed a lot more.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Joe!


You must be pretty busy today. ^^

I hope to see you on Thursday!

This composition is quite nice.

I agree that gender equality has a great role in developing a nation.

And in order to achieve this, unity must be present. ^^


~~t. Ally



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It can be resolved the social conflict that under the gender issues and also can help stable development of a nation.
>> It can resolve the social conflict that is under the gender issue and it can also help stabilize the development of a nation.


 Men is existence that worth of human dignity before from origin, gender and areas.
>> I am not sure what you mean here, please expound on this during our class, correct me if my correction is wrong.^^

>> From the beginning of time, man\'s existence meant that they are worthy of human dignity, along with specific genders and other areas.


 Gender equality must be taken place from base on that basic Ideology.
>> Gender equality must take place from the base of that basic ideology.

 For instance the society capacity can be developed to 100 percent by females participation if that is 50 percent by only males responsibility
>> For instance, the society\'s capacity can be developed to a hundred % by the participation of females, but with mere participation of males, the society can only develop up to 50%.

 Therefore when both sexes participate in society justly then entire state and society capacities can be developed a lot more.

>> Therefore when both sexes participate in society justly, then the entire society\'s state and capacities can be developed a lot more.

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