Why is it important to be contented with the things we already have? (in 5 sentences)

2019-02-15 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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Why is it important to be contented with the things we already have? (in 5 sentences) Someone told me that people who pursue happiness are unhappy. He was implying that while they look forward to the distant or future happiness, they are easily missing the close and present happiness. I agree with that perspective to some extent, but I don’t think, dreaming a better future cannot consist with being contented with the current life. We need to remember that there could be a thrilling trick behind the statement of being contented with what you already have. The Establishment in the society of the rank uses that concept as governing arts to prevent people in lower class from trying to reach upper class.

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Hi [이름]!


Reading your composition gave me goose bumps!

There is so much truth in this.

I think this is one of your best answers to all our homework compositions. ^^

I\'m looking forward to more of these!

And I want to talk more about this in class, because the concept of true happiness is quite intriguing.



~~t. Ally




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Someone told me that people who pursue happiness are unhappy.

>> CORRECT!


 He was implying that while they look forward to the distant or future happiness, they are easily missing the close and present happiness.

>>  He was implying that while they look forward to the near or distant future happiness, they are easily missing the close and present happiness.


 I agree with that perspective to some extent, but I don’t think, dreaming a better future cannot consist with being contented with the current life.

>>  I agree with that perspective to some extent, but I don’t think dreaming about a better future cannot consist with being contented with the current life.


 We need to remember that there could be a thrilling trick behind the statement of being contented with what you already have.

>> We need to remember that there could be a thrilling trick behind the state of being contented with what you already have.


 The Establishment in the society of the rank uses that concept as governing arts to prevent people in lower class from trying to reach upper class.

>> The Establishment in our society of ranks use that as a concept that governs arts to prevent people from the lower class from trying to rise up to the upper class.

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