Why is it that a lot of women love shopping while men don\'t? Explain your answer in five sentences.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think most shopping malls have more women\'s goods (cosmetics, clothes, etc.) than men\'s products at a glance.And men\'s hobbies are playing games, sports, etc.But I think it is because women are more interested in clothes and cosmetics.And I think most men don\'t really care about taking care of me.(Celebrities may be excluded, but...)But women are very interested in their skin and care about what they want to look pretty, so naturally, there will be more women\'s products to earn more income.
강사 첨삭
Hello Su A ,
Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you.
Keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)
Why is it that a lot of women love shopping while men don\\\'t? Explain your answer in five sentences.
I think most shopping malls have more women\'s goods (cosmetics, clothes, etc.) than men\'s products at a glance.
>>> I think most shopping malls have more women\'s goods such as cosmetics, clothes, etc. than men\'s products.
And men\'s hobbies are playing games, sports, etc.But I think it is because women are more interested in clothes and cosmetics.
>>> Men\'s hobbies are playing games, sports, etc. But I think it is because women are more interested in clothes and cosmetics than men do.
And I think most men don\'t really care about taking care of me.(Celebrities may be excluded, but...)
>>> I also think that most men don\'t really care about taking care of themselves; celebrities may be excluded.
But women are very interested in their skin and care about what they want to look pretty, so naturally, there will be more women\'s products to earn more income.
>>>> But women are very interested in their skin and they take care of it because they want to look pretty, so naturally, there are more women\'s products and it will earn more income.
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