Why is keeping yourself fit important?
학생이 쓴 원문
If I want to be happy with my family for so long, I have to manage my health. And if I don\'t have health, I can\'t earn money anymore.
Because I\'m young so far, that\'s a shame. I don\'t want to live a sick life.
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Hi, [이름]!
3. Because I\'m young so far, that\'s a shame.
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Here are some things to take note of:
1. If I want to be happy with my family for so long, I have to manage my health.
>>If I want to be happy with my family for a longer time, I have to manage my health.
2. And if I don\'t have health, I can\'t earn money anymore.
>>If I don\'t keep myself healthy, I can\'t earn money anymore.
3. Because I\'m young so far, that\'s a shame.
>>For someone like me who\'s still young, that\'s a shame.
4. I don\'t want to live a sick life.
>>I don\'t want to live a sickly life.
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