Why is North Korea suffering from a serious shortage of electricity and food
학생이 쓴 원문
North korea is communism.One person has everything. So most people are dying.
I\'m sorry that this situation.but I don\'t help them.
Because powerful men just are interested their\'s weapons. If I help them,they may are devloping various weapons.And so did it.
we send money and food them right after,
they always attack us.
I\'m oppositon help them.
강사 첨삭
Hi JO!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts on the given topic.
Basing from your opinion, I think North Korea has different mindset from the South.
Your country is democratic. They aren\'t. And I hear a lot of testimonies of North Koreans who escaped from their country.
So, I understand your point.
Here are the corrections.
North korea is communism.One person has everything. So most people are dying.
>> North Korea is communism. One person has everything. So, most people are dying.
I\'m sorry that this situation.but I don\'t help them.
>> I\'m sorry about this situation, but I don\'t help them.
Because powerful men just are interested their\'s weapons.
>> Because powerful men are just interested in their weapons.
If I help them,they may are devloping various weapons.And so did it.
>> If I help them, they may develop various weapons. And so, did it.
we send money and food them right after, they always attack us.
>> If we send money and food to them, they always attack us right after.
I\'m oppositon help them.
>> I\'m opposing to help them.
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