Why is online shopping popular now?
학생이 쓴 원문
Dear [Name],
It is only 2days in this year. I think online shopping is a future trend. because of Covid19, online shopping is more useful than offline shopping. Today, I visited shopping mall(IKEA), but our family could not eat food there, shopping mall prohibited to eat food in the mall.
So I bought something to eat and we took it to my house and we ate it. so it is impossible to do something in the any place this time.
I think, it is reason that we like online shopping mall now.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]
Sorry I\'m really busy today. I did my best to correct your composition.
Dear [Name],
It is only 2days in this year.
It is only 2days in this year.
>> What do you mean with this sentence?
I think online shopping is a future trend because of Covid19.
>> CORRECT
Online shopping is more useful than offline shopping.
>> CORRECT
Today, I visited shopping mall(IKEA), but our family could not eat food there, shopping mall prohibited to eat food in the mall.
>> Today, I visited IKEA shopping mall but we could not eat food there because the shopping mall prohibits people from eating food in the mall.
So I bought something to eat and we took it to my house and we ate it. so it is impossible to do something in the any place this time.
>> So I bought something to eat and we brought it to my house and we ate it so it is impossible to do things in any places this time.
I think, it is reason that we like online shopping mall now.
>> I think it is the reason why we like online shopping mall nowadays.
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