Why is our health important?
학생이 쓴 원문
These days, lots of people try to have a well balanced diet and exercise. I think they are trying to make their health good. I also think that health is important. Because if we don\'t care about our health, we will get sick and will be fat. Health is important to everyone and if health is not good, they will be weak. So, I think health is really important to our life!
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
Thank you for submitting your answer! Great job! ^^
I agree with your answer.
We should always take care of our health since it is very important.
Stay healthy! ^^
~Teacher Gina
>> CORRECT.
I think they are trying to make their health good.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I think they are trying to improve their health.
I also think that health is important.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I also think that health is substantial in our life.
Because if we don\'t care about our health, we will get sick and will be fat.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: It\'s because if we will take our health for granted, we will get sick and fat.
Health is important to everyone and if health is not good, they will be weak.
>> Health is important to everyone and if it is not good, they will be weak.
So, I think health is really important to our life!
>> CORRECT.
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