Why is youth voting important?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think voting for youth is important in that you can know about democracy properly.
Youths learn about democracy and voting only through books until they reach adulthood.
They haven\'t had a chance to actually try it themselves.
However, the age at which people can vote has been adjusted in Korea, so above 18 youths can also vote.
It can be important for youths to have the opportunity to vote in person and to experience democracy.
It\'s my personal opinion, but I hope that youths do to vote and have a surprise and a heavy sense of responsibility that the world is changing a little bit.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
I appreciate your response, and I have to add that voting is the very least you can do for your country. Thus, I do hope that everyone will take advantage of their opportunities carefully ^^
Chammy
I think voting for youth is important in that you can know about democracy properly.>>CORRECT
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>>I believe that youth participation is necessary for gaining a proper understanding of democracy.
Youths learn about democracy and voting only through books until they reach adulthood.
They haven\'t had a chance to actually try it themselves.
However, the age at which people can vote has been adjusted in Korea, so above 18 youths can also vote.
It can be important for youths to have the opportunity to vote in person and to experience democracy.
>>CORRECT
It\'s my personal opinion, but I hope that youths do to vote and have a surprise and a heavy sense of responsibility that the world is changing a little bit.
It\'s my personal opinion, but I hope that youths do to vote and have a surprise and a heavy sense of responsibility that the world is changing a little bit.
>> It\'s my personal opinion, but I hope that youths do vote and be surprised and feel a great sense of responsibility that the world is changing a little bit.
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