Why our body need sleep
학생이 쓴 원문
My body works hard all day, so it needs sleep.
We study, do homework, play with friends and talk with people a day.
Our energy is down.
Therefore, we need to take a rest and sleep.
I had no any problems about sleeping.
However, I have a story about that.
One day, I studied at night.
I was so tired because it was night.
And then, I slept while studying.
I realized that sleeping is important for us again.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Don\'t give in to stress.
Keep fighting and find a balance in your life.
Everybody deserves peace and happiness.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
My body works hard all day, so it needs sleep.
>> Correct
We study, do homework, play with friends and talk with people a day.
We study, do homework, play with friends and talk with people a day.
>> We study, do homework, play with friends and talk with people during the day.
Our energy is down.
Our energy is down.
>> Correct
Therefore, we need to take a rest and sleep.
Therefore, we need to take a rest and sleep.
>> Correct
I had no any problems about sleeping.
I had no any problems about sleeping.
>> I have never had any problems about sleeping.
However, I have a story about that.
However, I have a story about that.
>> Correct
One day, I studied at night.
One day, I studied at night.
>> Correct
I was so tired because it was night.
I was so tired because it was night.
>> I was so tired because it was really late.
And then, I slept while studying.
And then, I slept while studying.
>> I fell asleep while studying.
I realized that sleeping is important for us again.
I realized that sleeping is important for us again.
>> I realized again that sleeping is important for us.
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