Why Sales and Analytics?

2022-04-11 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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My motivation derives from tech-based client service and the aspiration for a career at Bloomberg. I am passionate about customer service and sales in the financial service industry. The analytics department works as a user-friendly communicator between the financial market and technology. The department attends to client inquiries and ensures clients find the most value out of Terminal through constant engagement. This environment would allow me to contribute to clients\' success in digitization which would be motivating. Such a customer-centric environment would allow me to ground a career in Bloomberg. As a representative, I would get exposed to Terminal and learn more about market-moving factors. Most importantly, an extensive customer base would allow me to grasp customers\' pain points and navigate the solution to meet their specific needs. With client interaction backed by in-depth knowledge of the product portfolio, I believe I would pursue a rewarding career at Bloomberg.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for this Aciel!

My motivation derives from tech-based client service and the aspiration for a career at Bloomberg. 
>>>  correct
I am passionate about customer service and sales in the financial service industry. 
>>>  correct
The analytics department works as a user-friendly communicator between the financial market and technology. 
>>>  correct
The department attends to client inquiries and ensures clients find the most value out of Terminal through constant engagement. 
>>>  correct
This environment would allow me to contribute to clients\' success in digitization which would be motivating. 
>>>  correct
Such a customer-centric environment would allow me to ground a career in Bloomberg.
>>>  correct
>>> OR: Such a customer-centric environment would allow me to establish the foundation of my career in Bloomberg.
 As a representative, I would get exposed to Terminal and learn more about market-moving factors. 
>>>   correct
Most importantly, an extensive customer base would allow me to grasp customers\' pain points and navigate the solution to meet their specific needs. 
>>>   correct
With client interaction backed by in-depth knowledge of the product portfolio, I believe I would pursue a rewarding career at Bloomberg.
>>>   correct

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