Why should governments do more to address climate change?
학생이 쓴 원문
There are many reasons for governmets to do more to address climate change.
First, it can be hard for just only one person to do something for climate change. Also, Doing something personally can have limitations.
In order to take action broadly, people need to have the government\'s support.
Second, even though more people are concerned about climate chage, still many people don\'t know the importance or severity of climate change. That\'s why governments should inform and announce about it to the public. Also, they need to guide people what to do for it.
Overall, both individuals and governments will need to make efforts to address climate changes for the future.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Serena!
Well done! This is a clear and well-structured opinion. I like how you organized your ideas into clear points and explained them step by step. Your message is easy to follow, and your conclusion summarizes your opinion well.
You also show good awareness of a global issue and try to explain both responsibility and awareness, which makes your writing meaningful.
Keep it up! Your ideas are getting stronger and more developed!
~Teacher Polly
There are many reasons for governments to do more to address climate change.
>>CORRECT
First, it can be hard for just only one person to do something for climate change.
>>First, it can be hard for just one person to do something about climate change.
Also, Doing something personally can have limitations.
>>Also, doing something individually can have limitations.
In order to take action broadly, people need to have the government\'s support.
>>In order to take action on a larger scale, people need the government\'s support.
Second, even though more people are concerned about climate chage, still many people don\'t know the importance or severity of climate change.
>>Second, even though more people are concerned about climate change, many still do not know the importance or severity of the issue.
That\'s why governments should inform and announce about it to the public.
>>That is why governments should inform and raise awareness among the public.
Also, they need to guide people what to do for it.
>>Also, they need to guide people on what to do about it.
Overall, both individuals and governments will need to make efforts to address climate changes for the future.
>>Overall, both individuals and governments need to make efforts to address climate change for the future.
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