Why the farm animals are important
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the farm animals are important.
That is because we can eat they to have protein.
My second reason is we can use their fur to make clothes.
Third, can make invents about animals similar. Example, we can see duck\'s feet, and we can make flippers.
Finally, we can block the farm animals are extinction.
강사 첨삭
Hey, [이름]! It\'s nice to know that you know how farm animals help people. You were able to use good expressions in your homework. Keep it up!
- Teacher Debbie
>> This is a good sentence.
That is because we can eat they to have protein.
>> That is because we can eat them to get protein.
My second reason is we can use their fur to make clothes.
>> The second reason is we can use their fur to make clothes.
Third, can make invents about animals similar.
>> Third, we can invent something similar to animal parts.
Example, we can see duck\'s feet, and we can make flippers.
>> For example, the flippers are similar to the ducks\' feet.
Finally, we can block the farm animals are extinction.
>> Therefore, we should prevent farm animal extinction.
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