why the health is important
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In my opinion, health is the most important thing in the life.
>> In my opinion, health is the most important thing in life.
Someone said \\\"If you loss money you loss a little bit, If you loss friends you loss mamy things amd if you loss the health you loss everything.\"
>> Someone said, \"If you lose money, you lose a little bit; if you lose friends, you lose many things; but if you lose your health, you lose everything.\"
I agree aboit that.
>> I agree with that.
the health are not only body but also mental.
>> Health includes both the body and the mind.
When I got depression, I could not take care about my body.
>> Correct
as a result I became fat.
>> As a result, I became fat.
Someday I had wanted to overcome it and I have started to run since Apr 2022.
>> However, I wanted to overcome it someday, so I started running in April 2022.
I loss my weight and I can feel clear my mind.
>> I lost weight and now I feel clearer in my mind.
I am sorry for saying that I am planning to go on a bussiness trip tomorrow.
>> I am sorry for saying that I am planning to go on a business trip tomorrow.
see you next monday and have a nice weekend.
>> See you next Monday and have a nice weekend.
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