Will computers ever take over the world?

2015-05-12 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Computers have been changing our lives in all aspects. We, these days, heavily reply on computers to do daily tasks such as communicating with colleagues, controlling room temperatures, and even doing house chores. I personally do not think that computers will take over the world completely, however, our dependency on computers will be getting severer, so that we might not be able to survive even a day without computers. The problem is that the purpose of using computers is to help humans have better, easier, more comfortable, and happier life, however, on the contrary, we could be ruled by them. Humans will have become disgustingly lazy and dependent on technology to entertain, educate, inform and do their jobs. The nicer we are to our computers, the more responsive they become. I think computers will eventually interfere with emotion. I don’t think they will necessarily take over the world, but I think they could become a human and a human like.

강사 첨삭

Good Tuesday to you Sir [이름]!

I am glad that I receive compositions from you everyday.

You are one of the students I look forward talking to.

I totally agree with your ideas written below.

Computers might control our daily activities in the future.

Like what you\'ve mentioned, computer might interfere our emotions.

Anyway, we can talk more about this in class.

Teacher Nina

Computers have been changing our lives in all aspects.

>> correct

We, these days, heavily reply on computers to do daily tasks such as communicating with colleagues, controlling room temperatures, and even doing house chores.

>> Did you mean: We, these days, heavily rely on computers to do daily tasks such as communicating with colleagues, controlling room temperatures, and even doing house chores.

I personally do not think that computers will take over the world completely, however, our dependency on computers will be getting severer, so that we might not be able to survive even a day without computers.

>> correct

>> OR: I personally do not think that computers will take over the world completely. However, with our dependency on computers will be getting severer, so that we might not be able to survive even a day without computers.

The problem is that the purpose of using computers is to help humans have better, easier, more comfortable, and happier life, however, on the contrary, we could be ruled by them.

>> correct

>> OR: The problem is that the purpose of using computers is to help humans have better, easier, more comfortable, and happier life. However, on the contrary, we could be ruled by them.

Humans will have become disgustingly lazy and dependent on technology to entertain, educate, inform and do their jobs.

>> correct

>> OR: Humans will become disgustingly lazy and dependent on technology to entertain, educate, inform and do their jobs.

The nicer we are to our computers, the more responsive they become.

>> correct

I think computers will eventually interfere with emotion.

>> correct

I don’t think they will necessarily take over the world, but I think they could become a human and a human like.

>> correct

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