Will there always be poverty in the world?
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Will there always be poverty in the world?
Nobody know how the future is, but I don’t have bright vision to solve poverty within a century.
>>Nobody knows how the future is going to be. And I don’t have a clear vision in solving poverty within a century.
Since escaping vulnerable life dependent on hunt and collecting, human has struggled to keep private values competitively, and this race has generated the underprivileged.
>>Since avoiding being vulnerable in life is dependent on hunting and collecting, human beings have struggled in keeping their private values. This race has generated the existence of the underprivileged.
In addition, the dream that expectation to build a utopia, through getting rid of ownership and the redistribution of the whole national wealth, looks almost failed, when we see the most countries where are adopted communism.
>>In addition, the dream and the expectation of building a utopia, through getting rid of owning things and the redistribution of the whole national wealth, seemed to have failed. We see this in most countries where they have adopted communism.
Because they collapsed or had to partially admit and adjust to their opposite regime to survive.
>>Because they collapsed and some had to partially admit defeat and had to adjust to the current regime in order to survive.
I don’t know how much amount of goods is enough to satisfy every person, but it would be true that supply is not still able to catch up with demand.
>>I don’t know how much amount of foods are enough to satisfy every hungry person, but it is true that the supply is still way too far in order to catch up with the existing demand.
It might be the fundamental reason why this tumor exists even though lots of people exert their effort to eliminate it.
>>It might be the fundamental reason why this problem still exists even though lots of people are exerting a lot of efforts just to eliminate it.
Nonetheless, I hope to find a clue at technology that the developing speed is getting faster in infinite trials to overcome our limitation.
>>Nonetheless, I hope to find a clue from the existing technology so that the developing rate will speed up in terms of conducting some tests to overcome our limitation.
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