Winter season
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi, Lucy.
It was snowy here fron 10 to 11 this mornng.
Than time, my son and I went a bakery walking.
It\'s an hour\'s walk from there.
The bakery is our favorite store because there makes bread by rice.
It seemed peaceful that snow piled up is at the vast land when I watched from movie or America drama.
Although small area, I wanted to walk on the snow.
Whe we left from bakery, the snow has stopped but it started strong wind.
It was really cold.
In the cold winter season, I do to wear thick clothe, turn on the boiler, and drink warm water a lot.
It\'s tolerable to get used to the cold because it\'s cold for days and warm for days.
Good night.
강사 첨삭
Thank you Ms. [Name]!
Oh, how I wish I could experience those stuff. :)
~Lucy
It was snowy here fron 10 to 11 this mornng.
>>It was snowy here from 10 to 11 this morning.
Than time, my son and I went a bakery walking.
>>That time, my son and I went to a bakery by walking.
It\'s an hour\'s walk from there.
>>CORRECT!
The bakery is our favorite store because there makes bread by rice.
The bakery is our favorite store because there makes bread by rice.
>>The bakery is our favorite store because they make bread by rice.
It seemed peaceful that snow piled up is at the vast land when I watched from movie or America drama.
>>It seemed peaceful that snow piled up at the vast land when I watched from movie or America drama.
Although small area, I wanted to walk on the snow.
>>Although, it\'s a small area, I wanted to walk on the snow.
Whe we left from bakery, the snow has stopped but it started strong wind.
>>When we left the bakery, the snow has stopped but it strong wind has started.
It was really cold.
>>CORRECT!
In the cold winter season, I do to wear thick clothe, turn on the boiler, and drink warm water a lot.
>>CORRECT!In the cold winter season, I do to wear thick clothe, turn on the boiler, and drink warm water a lot.
It\'s tolerable to get used to the cold because it\'s cold for days and warm for days.
>>CORRECT!
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