wish(1)
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Have ever wanted your wish to be true? It\'s the same way like Gini granting Aladdin 3 wishes. Then, what will you wish? Having magical powers? How about flying? Here are 3 wishes I want to granted. First, I want to have magical powers. This power includes flying, and makes me like a character of Harry Potter. I wanted to fly and have magical powers ever since I read Harry Potter. It will be so fun. Second, I want to have 3 cats and everything for the cats. I want to have a Turkish Angora, a Russian Blue,and a Shamize cat. Also, I will need food and many things for the cats. I wanted a cat but my mom said No! But l can have a cat if it was a wish. Third, I want my family to live long, be happy and not fighting. Our family includes mom, dad, and me. In my second wish, was having 3 cats. I want to live happily with the 3 cats,mom, dad. What are your wishes? Having magical powers? Having 3cats?Or do you want your family to live long and be happy?
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Hello Rose! How you\'ve been? I missed you in class. Can\'t wait to talk to you again. Thanks for sending this in. Here are your composition corrections.
T. Matt
Have ever wanted your wish to be true?
>>Have you ever wanted your wishes to come true?
>>Have you ever wanted to have your wishes granted?
It\'s the same way like Gini granting Aladdin 3 wishes.
>>It\'s the same way like Genie granting Aladdin\'s three (3) wishes.
Then, what will you wish? Having magical powers? How about flying?
>>Then, what will you wish for ? Having magical powers? How about flying?
>>Then what will you wish for? Magical powers? How about the ability to fly?
Here are 3 wishes I want to granted.
>>Here are my three wishes I want to be granted.
First, I want to have magical powers.
>>Correct
This power includes flying, and makes me like a character of Harry Potter.
>>This power includes flying, and it will make me like a character from Harry Potter.
I wanted to fly and have magical powers ever since I read Harry Potter.
>>Correct
It will be so fun.
>>Correct
>>It will be so much fun!
Second, I want to have 3 cats and everything for the cats.
>>Correct
>>Second, I want to have three cats and everything for the cats.
I want to have a Turkish Angora, a Russian Blue,and a Shamize cat.
>>I want to have a Turkish Angora, a Russian Blue,and a Siamese cat.
Also, I will need food and many things for the cats.
>>Correct
I wanted a cat but my mom said No!
>>I wanted a cat but my mom said, \"No!\"
But l can have a cat if it was a wish.
>>Correct
>>However, l can have a cat if it was a wish.
>>However, I could wish for a cat.
Third, I want my family to live long, be happy and not fighting.
>>Third, I want my family to live long, be happy and not fight.
Our family includes mom, dad, and me.
>>Correct
>>My family consists of mom, dad, and I.
In my second wish, was having 3 cats. I want to live happily with the 3 cats,mom, dad.
>>If my second wish about having three cats was granted, I want to live happily with my mom, dad and my three cats.
What are your wishes? Having magical powers? Having 3cats?Or do you want your family to live long and be happy?
>>What are your wishes? Having magical powers? Having three (3)cats? Or do you want your family to live long and be happy?
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