Wish you like my composition today :)!!!

Before I write my essay, I want to say sorry to you. I have to admit that I didn't allocate enough time to write my composition. And that was revealed through the quality of my essay. I don't want to make excuses but these days because of my inefficient time management, I haven't got most of my school homework done yet. (You may be heard me saying "I don't feel like doing my homework" in our class.) I think things I had to do were beyond my ability. However I promise you that my essay would be better and better from now on!! :) !! Wow! My preliminary was too long.kkk Here is my opinion about today's topic. The sentence "Do people need discipline to achieve freedom?" sounds ironic to me. I don't know if I'm the only person who feels this way, but to me discipline seems alike rules. And if there are a lot of rules that restrain us, how can we get our freedom?!! So I think people don't need discipline to achieve their freedom. Today's topic is difficult to write. ToT kkkk Bye :) !!!

Happy Wednesday, [이름]! Oh~ How I appreciate every essay you submit and of course, we understand you! I know school has been demanding these days^^ Anyways, like what you have promised, I am going to expect a lot, okay^^ See you! Before I write my essay, I want to say sorry to you. >>CORRECT!  I have to admit that I didn\'t allocate enough time to write my composition. >>CORRECT! And that was revealed through the quality of my essay. >>CORRECT! I don\'t want to make excuses but these days because of my inefficient time management, I haven\'t got most of my school homework done yet. >>CORRECT!  (You may be heard me saying \"I don\'t feel like doing my homework\" in our class.) >> (You might have heard me saying \"I don\'t feel like doing my homework\" in our class.) I think things I had to do were beyond my ability. >>CORRECT! However I promise you that my essay would be better and better from now on!! :) !! >>CORRECT!Wow! My preliminary was too long.kkk >>CORRECT! >>Wow! My introduction was too long.kkkHere is my opinion about today\'s topic. >>CORRECT! The sentence \"Do people need discipline to achieve freedom?\" sounds ironic to me. >>CORRECT! I don\'t know if I\'m the only person who feels this way, but to me discipline seems alike rules. >>I do not know if I am the only person who feels this way, but to me, discipline and rules seem to be the same. >>I do not know if I am the only person who feels this way, but to me, discipline and rules seem to be alike.  And if there are a lot of rules that restrain us, how can we get our freedom?!! >>CORRECT! >>Moreover, if there are a lot of rules which restrain us, how can we achieve freedom?  So I think people don\'t need discipline to achieve their freedom. >>CORRECT!Today\'s topic is difficult to write. ToT kkkk >>Today\'s topic is difficult to write about. ToT kkkk  Bye :) !!!  >>CORRECT!