With a curfew, teenagers can’t have any fun. Do you agree? Why or why not?
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I do not agree that teenagers can’t have any fun with a curfew. Almost all students who have curfews should go back house until 9-10 p.m. It is not too early time. Students can enough enjoy their fun during the daytime. I understand that some students can not enjoy their fun because of the private educational institutes. If we can protect students from dangerous things, is curfew endurable? To give greater and healthier freedom to students who will become adults, curfews are needed while they are maturing up.
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Hi, Helena!
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-T. Caitlyn
I do not agree that teenagers can’t have any fun with a curfew.
>> CORRECT
Almost all students who have curfews should go back house until 9-10 p.m.
>> Almost all students who have curfews should go home at 9-10 p.m.
It is not too early time.
>> It\'s not that early anymore.
Students can enough enjoy their fun during the daytime.
>> Students can still have fun during the daytime.
I understand that some students can not enjoy their fun because of the private educational institutes.
>> I understand that some students can not enjoy or have fun because of the private educational institutes.
If we can protect students from dangerous things, is curfew endurable?
>> If we can protect students from dangerous things, isn\'t curfew endurable or bearable?
To give greater and healthier freedom to students who will become adults, curfews are needed while they are maturing up.
>> To give greater and healthier freedom to students who will become adults, curfews are needed while they are maturing.
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