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2017-06-07 · 첨삭 강사 Travis

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I totally agree that offering food is one of the solutions to prevent the age of foodstuff as growing world population. I have been watching the documentary regarding our future ages that will may effect our eco-system as a lot of forms such as the lack of food. One of the representative difficulties is the lack of food in the world as growing the numerous population. A lot of experts argue that securing enough and healthy food should be a key point to overcome the age of foodstuff from now on. Also they are giving a warning us to overlook these signals from the nature including global warming. For these reasons that I have been experiencing from mass media, I agree that offering food enough to people and having technical methods to produce the food is important solution to overcome the future ages and give wise advices to future generation.

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I totally agree that offering food is one of the solutions to prevent the age of foodstuff as growing world population.
>>Correct.

>>OR: I totally agree that offering food is a solution to prevent foodstuff as world population is growing.
 I have been watching the documentary regarding our future ages that will may effect our eco-system as a lot of forms such as the lack of food.
>>Correct.

>>OR: I\'ve been watching documentary about our future generation that will affect our eco-system as a lot forms such as the lack of food.
 One of the representative difficulties is the lack of food in the world as growing the numerous population.
>>One of the difficulties is the lack of food in the world as population is growing.
A lot of experts argue that securing enough and healthy food should be a key point to overcome the age of foodstuff from now on.
>>Correct.

>>OR: Most experts argue that to secure enough and healthy food should be a key point to overcome the age of foodstuff from now on.
 Also they are giving a warning us to overlook these signals from the nature including global warming.
>>They are also giving a warning to us to overlook these sign from nature including global warming.
For these reasons that I have been experiencing from mass media, I agree that offering food enough to people and having technical methods to produce the food is important solution to overcome the future ages and give wise advices to future generation.

>>Correct.

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