Women\'s empowerment.
학생이 쓴 원문
It is hard to pick only one person who has affected the most in terms of women\'s empowerment out of a number of renowned figures in history. Furthermore, I firmly believe that the women\'s social status has gradually been improved as a result of accumulated efforts made by lay people during their daily lives, not by a few prominent individuals\' huge impacts. In this respect, it is safe to say that the recent \"Me Too\" movement has played a critical role in revealing how badly females have been sexually harrassed by males who abuse their power and superior positions. The severity of this issue was largely disregarded within many societies though it has ruined many women\'s lives physically and psychologically because of the patriarchical social order among them. It was systematically impossible for women to voice what they think and how they should be treated. Even now, depite the significant influence of the movement, females should put themselves at stake just to require gender equality.
강사 첨삭
Hi Drexel! Thank you for your thoughts here! I really appreciate the consistency and the effort.
Well done! Keep it up! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
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Furthermore, I firmly believe that the women\'s social status has gradually been improved as a result of accumulated efforts made by lay people during their daily lives, not by a few prominent individuals\' huge impacts.
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In this respect, it is safe to say that the recent \"Me Too\" movement has played a critical role in revealing how badly females have been sexually harassed by males who abuse their power and superior positions.
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The severity of this issue was largely disregarded within many societies though it has ruined many women\'s lives physically and psychologically because of the patriarchical social order among them.
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It was systematically impossible for women to voice what they think and how they should be treated.
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Even now, depite the significant influence of the movement, females should put themselves at stake just to require gender equality.
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