Women\'s volleyball
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I think a volleyball is most famous sport for women in Korea. Kim Yeon Kyoung who is world-famous women volleyball athlete is very popular to Korea women. She is now belong to Turkish volleyball team. Many fans go to Turkey and other country to watch and cheer her. In Korea, also women\'s volleyball is more popular than men\'s volleyball, because women\'s teams do well than men\'s teams. The national women\'s volleyball team got many medals, however their annual income is lower than men\'s volleyball team. It\'s definetely contradictory and many athletes and fans is working hard to change this situation. I like just watching volleyball game not doing, because it\'s very hard to recieve and attack. I played volleyball twice or third time, but my wrist got a bruise. If I endured and practiced that time, maybe I could like and play volleyball. Sometimes I want to learn volleyball, but many amateur teams are less women member. If I get a chance to learn volleyball, I will practice hard this time.
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Good afternoon, [이름]!
Thank you for answering the homework question and for sharing your thoughts about volleyball.
It\'s actually the same in my country. Volleyball is the most famous sport for women as well. ^^
~Teacher Gina
>> I think volleyball is the most famous sport for women in Korea.
Kim Yeon Kyoung who is world-famous women volleyball athlete is very popular to Korea women.
>> Kim Yeon Kyoung who is a famous world woman volleyball athlete is very popular to Korean women.
She is now belong to Turkish volleyball team.
>> She now belongs to a Turkish volleyball team.
Many fans go to Turkey and other country to watch and cheer her.
>> Many fans go to Turkey and other countries to watch and cheer for her.
In Korea, also women\'s volleyball is more popular than men\'s volleyball, because women\'s teams do well than men\'s teams.
>> In Korea, women\'s volleyball is more popular than men\'s volleyball because women\'s teams do better than men\'s teams.
The national women\'s volleyball team got many medals, however their annual income is lower than men\'s volleyball team.
>> CORRECT.
It\'s definetely contradictory and many athletes and fans is working hard to change this situation.
>> It\'s definitely contradictory and many athletes and fans are working hard to change this situation.
I like just watching volleyball game not doing, because it\'s very hard to recieve and attack.
>> I just like watching a volleyball game while not doing anything because it\'s very hard to receive and attack.
I played volleyball twice or third time, but my wrist got a bruise.
>> I played volleyball twice or thrice but my wrist got a bruise.
If I endured and practiced that time, maybe I could like and play volleyball.
>> CORRECT.
Sometimes I want to learn volleyball, but many amateur teams are less women member.
>> Sometimes, I want to learn volleyball but many amateur teams have less counts of women members.
If I get a chance to learn volleyball, I will practice hard this time.
>> CORRECT.
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