work-life balance life
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However, we are still in the process and there are several solutions which can accelerate this trend. Firstly, government should regulate working hours by law to protect worders. For instance, workers could only work from 9 A.M. to 6 P.M.. If they work overtime, owners should give them much more salaries than usual. Secondly, individuals need to step out of their old mind and enjoy their life with beloved ones. Also they can engage in community or hooby club to release stress. Surprisingly, it is observed that having enough rest is a good way to achieve better performance at work.
In conclusion, given that people tend to live happier, decreasing workload. It is neccessary for us to continue this phenomenon. Therefore, governments should encourage people have quality lives by providing legislative support.
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However, we are still in the process and there are several solutions which can accelerate this trend.>> Correct
Firstly, government should regulate working hours by law to protect worders.
>> Firstly, government should regulate working hours by law to protect workers.
For instance, workers could only work from 9 A.M. to 6 P.M..
>> For instance, workers should only work from 9 A.M. to 6 P.M.
If they work overtime, owners should give them much more salaries than usual.
>> If they work overtime, owners should give them much higher salaries than usual.
Secondly, individuals need to step out of their old mind and enjoy their life with beloved ones.
>> Secondly, individuals need to step out of their old fashioned way of thinking and enjoy their life with their loved ones.
Also they can engage in community or hooby club to release stress.
>> They can also engage in activities in clubs and in the community to release stress.
Surprisingly, it is observed that having enough rest is a good way to achieve better performance at work.
>> Correct
In conclusion, given that people tend to live happier, decreasing workload.
In conclusion, given that people tend to live happier, decreasing workload.
>> In conclusion, it\'s already a given that people tend to live more happily with a lighter workload.
It is neccessary for us to continue this phenomenon.
>> Correct
Therefore, governments should encourage people have quality lives by providing legislative support.
>> Therefore, governments should encourage people to have quality lives by providing legislative support.
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