World population in 1900 and 2000.
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The given pie charts illustrates the world population by continents in 1990 and 2000. >> The given pie charts illustrates the world population by continents in 1900 and 2000.
People can
see the differences of the number of population over the period where it has increased or decreased
or maintained.
>> People can see the differences in the number of population over the period where it has increased, decreased or remained constant.
The most visible difference was that the total number of population.
>> The most visible difference was the total number of population.
It was 1.6 billion in 1990,
while it had increased almost 3 times over a decade.
>> It was 1.6 billion in 1900, while it had increased almost 3 times more over a decade.
Asia still accounted for the biggest percent in
2000, even though it had decreased by 6 percent from 60 percent to 54 percent.
>> Asia still accounted for the biggest percentage in 2000, even though it had decreased by 6 percent from 60 percent to 54 percent.
Europe came
second with 14 percent in 2000, but the population dropped by 9 percent.
>> Correct
The population of Africa and Latin America had risen during the period compared to Asia and
Europe.
>> Correct
Especially, the population rose more than two times in 2000.
>> Correct
Interestingly, there were no
changes in North America and others with the same percent.
>> Interestingly, there were no changes in North America and others as it showed the same percentage.
However, there was a new category
named Middle East and North Africa in 2000.
>> Correct
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