World War II conquer game and Pyeongchang Olympic start
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Hi, [이름]!
I hope you can watch the opening of the Winter Olympics.
From the way you told stories about your new game, I think it is exciting.
Tell me more about how to play this game soon, ^^
Have a nice weekend!
_Teacher Dianne ^^
Today I played World War 2game.
>> Today, I played the game named World War 2.
I played over 6 hours.
>> correct
>> or: I played for more than 6 hours.
I conquer a lot of countries.
>> I conquered a lot of countries.
My country was Italy.
>> correct
And I conquer Russia,France,China,United Kingdom,Egypt,swiss and so on.
>> And I conquered Russia, France, China, United Kingdom, Egypt, Switzerland, and so on.
Tommorrow is the Pyeongchang Olympic\'s opening ceremony.
>> correct
>> Or: Tomorrow is the official start of the Pyeongchang Winter Olympics.
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