World War II conquer game and Pyeongchang Olympic start

2018-02-08 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

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Today I played World War 2game.I played over 6 hours.I conquer a lot of countries.My country was Italy.And I conquer Russia,France,China,United Kingdom,Egypt,swiss and so on.Tommorrow is the Pyeongchang Olympic's opening ceremony.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!


I hope you can watch the opening of the Winter Olympics.

From the way you told stories about your new game, I think it is exciting.

Tell me more about how to play this game soon, ^^

Have a nice weekend!


_Teacher Dianne ^^


Today I played World War 2game.

>> Today, I played the game named World War 2.

I played over 6 hours.

>> correct

>> or: I played for more than 6 hours.

I conquer a lot of countries.

>> I conquered a lot of countries.

My country was Italy.

>> correct

And I conquer Russia,France,China,United Kingdom,Egypt,swiss and so on.

>> And I conquered Russia, France, China, United Kingdom, Egypt, Switzerland, and so on.

Tommorrow is the Pyeongchang Olympic\'s opening ceremony.

>> correct

>> Or: Tomorrow is the official start of the Pyeongchang Winter Olympics.

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