Worst vice
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the worst vice is attacking other people. Violence is not allowed with any reasons. There are very serious situations happened in Korea. They try to kill strangers with the knife. We have to prevent that Violence and give heavy punishment.
강사 첨삭
Hello again, Thomas!
I absolutely agree. Attacking a person aside from self defense and war are unjustifiable and simply wrong. With the series of stabbing attacks in your country, the police may do something more than what they apparently practice.
Congratulations for getting all sentences almost all correctly! Your sentences are contain very good grammar structure.
See you on the next homework!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
Violence is not allowed with any reasons.
>> Correct!
There are very serious situations happened in Korea.
>> There are very serious situations that happened in Korea.
They try to kill strangers with the knife.
>> Correct!
We have to prevent that Violence and give heavy punishment.
>> Correct!
>> Correct!
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