Would people need to change how they think, for the world to be peaceful?
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Yes. Absolutely.
Few days ago, I saw one speech on TED which talked about what the bias is and how to overcome the bias.
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The orator said that when you don\'t have an experience on something, you can\'t understand what it could be. And everyone tends to reinforce what we believe already with taking lopsided informations.
>> The orator said that when you don\'t have an experience on something, you can\'t understand what it could be. Furthermore, everyone tends to reinforce what we already believe in by taking lopsided information.
He took an example.
>> Or: He set an example.
When a typoon swept the California and rained 50mm, nobody cared about the alert published 2 weekd ago on local newspaper.
>> When a typoon swept California and rained 50mm, nobody cared about the alert published 2 weeks ago on the local newspaper.
The artical (article) had warned that there would be 50-60mm rain in one day and the local residence should prepare for it.
>> Correct
But the local didn\'t know what it could represent the 55mm of rain and how it could be serious. So everything was floated.
>> But the locals didn\'t know what it could the 55mm of rain represent and how serious it could be. So everything floated/ so, everything was flooded.
I think it\'s a great example when we settle just for what we know, we can have a biased opinion.
>> Correct
We need to think differently in order to have a better life for ourselves and also for the others.
>> Correct
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