Would rather be very intelligent or very good looking? why
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I would rather be very intelligent than be very good looking. Like a old saying \"Don\'t judge a book by it\'s cover\", I believe that most important thing is not appearence, but what somebody has inside.
For a instance, If someone is very good looking,it is easy to appeal to others. So called first impression is usually made by looking. But after some time, people feel more attractive to someone who can communicate well and have great points of view.
In addition appearence will be changed by following the time passing. but intelligency will not be affected by time goes. Moreover, if someone can learning without stopping, he will be getting wiser than before.
In korea, there is a famous proverb \"If marry a good looking girl, you will happy for 3 years, if marry a wise girl, your family and you will happy for 3 generations\". I believe it is same to a man. For these reasons, I wish I would be a person with sexy brain.
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Like a old saying \"Don\'t judge a book by it\'s cover,\" I believe that most important thing is not appearence, but what somebody has inside.
>>>Like an old saying, \"Don\'t judge a book by its cover\", I believe that the most important thing is not the appearance, but what\'s inside.
For a instance, If someone is very good looking,it is easy to appeal to others.
>>>For an instance, if someone is very good looking, it is appealing to others.
So called first impression is usually made by looking.
>>> The so called first impression is usually based on good looks.
In addition appearence will be changed by following the time passing. but intelligency will not be affected by time goes.
>>>In addition, appearance will change as we age, but intelligence will not be affected over time.
Moreover, if someone can learning without stopping, he will be getting wiser than before.
>>>Moreover, if someone can learn without stopping, he will be wiser than before.
In korea, there is a famous proverb \"If marry a good looking girl, you will happy for 3 years, if marry a wise girl, your family and you will happy for 3 generations\".
>>>In Korea, there is a famous proverb \"If you marry a good looking girl, you will happy for 3 years, if marry a wise girl, you and your family will be happy for 3 generations.\"
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