Would u check these sentences, teacher?

2013-07-11 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

I will send 7 staffs of my team to you. They have a lot of experiences with this. And they are smart and always passionate on their work. Let me introduce MR. LEE who is a professor of HONG-IK University. He has a lot of experiences with this problem and he is a specialist on this field. So I am confident you will be satisfied with (their help / his help) I contacted (them / him) already. (They / He) will call you up to today. I will post a notice on the entrance of our apartment saying that do not smoke near the office windows. And I will upload the same message on our web site. I will post a notice on the bulletin board saying that we will have a celebration party soon. And I will upload the same message on our web site. I will post a notice on the entrance of our apartment saying that do not distribute flyers without authorization. I will make a new entrance card and distribute it to residents so that we can prevent a recurrence of this problem.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!!

A pleasant afternoon to you~~

Here are the corrections I\'ve made for you.

I hope it can help you.^^

Have a nice day and see you!

T.Hannah^^

I will send 7 staffs of my team to you. They have a lot of experiences with this. And they are smart and always passionate on their work.

>> CORRECT!! CORRECT!! CORRECT!!

>> OR: I will send 7 members of my team to you. They are the experienced ones.
Let me introduce MR. LEE who is a professor of HONG-IK University. He has a lot of experiences with this problem and he is a specialist on this field.

>> Let me introduce MR. LEE who is a professor at HONG-IK University. CORRECT!!
So I am confident you will be satisfied with (their help / his help)

>> CORRECT!!
I contacted (them / him) already. (They / He) will call you up to today.

>> CORRECT!! (They / He) will call you up today.
I will post a notice on the entrance of our apartment saying that do not smoke near the office windows.

>> I will post a notice on the entrance of our apartment saying that smoking is not allowed near the office windows.

And I will upload the same message on our web site.

>> CORRECT!!
I will post a notice on the bulletin board saying that we will have a celebration party soon. And I will upload the same message on our web site.

>> CORRECT!! CORRECT!!
I will post a notice on the entrance of our apartment saying that do not distribute flyers without authorization.

>> I will post a notice on the entrance of our apartment saying do not distribute flyers without proper authorization.

>> I will post a notice on the entrance of our apartment saying do not distribute flyers without permission.
I will make a new entrance card and distribute it to residents so that we can prevent a recurrence of this problem.

>> I will make a new entry card and distribute it to all the residents so that we can prevent the recurrence of this problem.

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