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I will make a new smoking area so that you can concentrate on your work. I will make a new regulation with this to prevent a recurrence of this problem I will reschedule our (labor schedule / bus schedule) I will reorganize our (cleaning system / delivery system) I think you should take an advertisement event near a subway station to advertise your cafe. I am confident it is effective because there are so many people. I think you should take a recruiting event near a university to have good employees. I am confident it is effective because there are so many talent students. I will go to the second floor right away and check the problem in person. Why don’t you drop by my office when you have a free time? We can walk about this problem in detail. You should participate in club activities such as sports. I recommend you the soccer club called ‘next’. In this club, many human resource department employees are active. So you can hang out with them easily by playing soccer with them.

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I will make a new smoking area so that you can concentrate on your work.
>> Correct

I will make a new regulation with this to prevent a recurrence of this problem.
>> Correct

I will reschedule our (labor schedule / bus schedule)
>> I will reschedule our bus. 

I will reorganize our (cleaning system / delivery system)
>> Correct

I think you should take an advertisement event near a subway station to advertise your cafe.

>> I think you should make an advertisement event near a subway station to advertise your cafe. 

I am confident it is effective because there are so many people.
>> Correct

I think you should take a recruiting event near a university to have good employees.

>> I think you should make a recruitment event near a university in order to get good employees. 

I am confident it is effective because there are so many talent students.
>> I am confident it is effective because there are so many talented students. 

I will go to the second floor right away and check the problem in person.
>> Correct

Why don’t you drop by my office when you have a free time?

>> Why don\'t your drop by my office when you have free time? 

We can walk about this problem in detail.
>> We can talk about this problem in detail. 

You should participate in club activities such as sports.

>> Correct

I recommend you the soccer club called ‘next’.

>> Correct

In this club, many human resource department employees are active.

>> Correct

So you can hang out with them easily by playing soccer with them.

>> Correct