Would you agree that people should go to jail when they abandon their pets?
학생이 쓴 원문
I agree that people go to jail when they abandon their pets. Nowdays there are a lot of people who raise their pets. The pets are our family. I have watched a TV program about abandoned pets. They are in some center for abondoned pets. But they jusy can stay for 10 days. If their owners don't come there or their new owner don't apprear, they can't be saved from death. There are many pets that can't escape death. I think people who abandon thier pets are same as murderer. So I think they must be punished and go to the jail if they abandon their pets.
강사 첨삭
Hi Shelly!^^
Thanks for the immediate response!^^
It\'s cruel how people get pets and just abandon them.
They must be guilty for what they do.
I absolutely agree with you!
They must be punished so that they can learn.
Do you have pets? How should people take care of pets in you opinion?
Have a great weekend!^^
Take care^^
T.Debby^^
Here are my corrections for you:
I agree that people go to jail when they abandon their pets.
>> I agree that people must go to jail when they abandon their pets. Nowdays there are a lot of people who raise their pets.
>> CORRECT
OR> A lot of people now have pets.
The pets are our family.
>> CORRECT
OR> Pets are considered family.
I have watched a TV program about abandoned pets.
>> CORRECT
OR> I saw a show that features abandoned pets.They are in some center for abondoned pets.
>> There are some centers for abondoned pets.
But they jusy can stay for 10 days.
>> But they just can stay for 10 days.
If their owners don\'t come there or their new owner don\'t apprear, they can\'t be saved from death.
>> If their owners don\'t go there or their new owner doesn\'t apprear, they can\'t be saved from death.
There are many pets that can\'t escape death.
>> CORRECT
OR> There are a lot of pets that can\'t escape death. I think people who abandon thier pets are same as murderer.
>> I think people who abandon thier pets are the same as murderer. So I think they must be punished and go to the jail if they abandon their pets.
>> So I think they must be punished and should go to the jail if they abandon their pets.
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