Would you be interested in doing backpacking?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, If I got friendes who do backpacking with me.
I wish to do it together, if I could have my child.
It could make our relation better. We would get our true growth together while helping each other.
강사 첨삭
Thanks for this Ms. [Name].
Yes, If I got friendes who do backpacking with me.
>>> Yes, if I got friends who would do backpacking with me.
I wish to do it together, if I could have my child.
I wish to do it together, if I could have my child.
>>> correct
>>> OR: I wish to do it together with my child if I would have one.
It could make our relation better.
It could make our relation better.
>>> OR: It could make our relationship better.
We would get our true growth together while helping each other.
>>> correct
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