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Hi there again Ms. [Name]!

Thanks for sending your composition.

You can check the corrections I have written below and if you have clarifications, do not hesitate to tell me.
Thank you!

See you later!

Always,
Kathrine ^^

I hope to find my job again.

>> I am hoping of finding a job again.

my dream is I want to be a good teacher teaching English.

>> My dream  is to be a good English teacher.

So I have to study about how to teach English way.

>> So I have to study how to teach English properly.
 also, I have learned English in korean, so I can\'t speak and listen English well.

>>  I have also  learned English in Korean, so I can\'t speak and listen in English very well.

so I applied for this class.
>> So I applied in this class.
 I am going to Hong seong with my family where is my husband\'s home.

>> I am going to Hong Seong with my family which is my husband\'s hometown.

I will meet my family-in-low.

>> I will meet my family-in-law.

>> or: I am going to meet family-in-law.

and I have to make a lot of Korean food for them.

>> correct!

We won\'t perform ancestral rites. because my father-in-low is the second oldest.

>> We  are not going to perform any ancestral rites because my father-in-law in the second son.

usually in korea, the oldest son perform ancestral rites. 

>> Usually in Korea, the eldest son performs the ancestral rites
 after one night, I am going to my hometown, Chon-an. and we will came back our home next day.
>> After one night, I am also going to my hometown in Cho-nan and we will go back home the next day.
he is supervisor at the landscaping firm. 

>> He is a supervisor in a landscaping firm.
 He make the street so beautiful.

>> He is making the streets look more beautiful.

>> or: He makes the streets look more beautiful.