Would you describe yourself as lucky? Why? Why not?
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I think I am really lucky person, even though I sometimes feel very depressed or unhappy.
Thanks to my mom, I\'ve experienced a lot of things since I was young.
For example, I did ballet for 5 years, joined a choir, learned figure-skating and learned to play the piano for 8 years.
My mom allowed me to learn many things although my family was not wealthy.
Those kind of experiences told me pleasure of enjoying arts.
They also make my life bountiful and sometimes I think these experiences give me energy to keep going on my life.
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Good morning [이름]!
At least you had fun when you were younger!
Thanks for sharing again :)
I think I am really lucky person, even though I sometimes feel very depressed or unhappy.
>> I sometimes feel depressed or unhappy, but I think I\'m a very lucky person.
Thanks to my mom, I\'ve experienced a lot of things since I was young.
>> CORRECT!
OR: Thanks to my mom, I have experienced many things since I was young.
For example, I did ballet for 5 years, joined a choir, learned figure-skating and learned to play the piano for 8 years.
>> For example, I did ballet for 5 years, joined the choir, learned figure skating, and learned piano for 8 years.
My mom allowed me to learn many things although my family was not wealthy.
>> My family is not rich, but my mom allowed me to learn many things.
Those kind of experiences told me pleasure of enjoying arts.
>> Those experiences gave me the pleasure of enjoying art.
They also make my life bountiful and sometimes I think these experiences give me energy to keep going on my life.
>> CORRECT!
OR: They also enrich my life, and sometimes I think these experiences give me energy to continue my life.
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