Would you encourage your children to accept a job in another country?
학생이 쓴 원문
I wouldn’t mind if my daughter wants to work overseas. Actually I’m eager to get a chance to work in another country because I like to pick up some local languages and learn how to work in the environment where the personalities of local people and the working culture will be different from what I’m used to here in Korea. People can hardly develop themselves if he/she stays in the same working environment. If we work with foreign people and in a foreign country, our view could be broadened. By exposing ourselves to different cultures, we can become more flexible and adapt ourselves to new things. There is cons about working overseas as well. You might face many difficulties. You might be discriminated and treated as an alien. Your safety could be at risk depending on where you stay. Local food cannot fit you. When you work in a city where hygiene or sanitation is poor, you might suffer from a health issue seriously because you cannot get a proper treatment when you get sick.
강사 첨삭
Good evening Sir [이름]. ^^
Thank you very much for your composition.
I totally agree with you. Working in the same environment might not be really good.
However, it still depends on the person.
Working in another country is also beneficial.
There might be hurdles along the way but we have to think positively and be strong.
Meeting other people will make us a better person.
See you in class. Take care.
Teacher Nina
I wouldn’t mind if my daughter wants to work overseas.
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Actually I’m eager to get a chance to work in another country because I like to pick up some local languages and learn how to work in the environment where the personalities of local people and the working culture will be different from what I’m used to here in Korea.
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People can hardly develop themselves if he/she stays in the same working environment.
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If we work with foreign people and in a foreign country, our view could be broadened.
>> correct
By exposing ourselves to different cultures, we can become more flexible and adapt ourselves to new things.
>> correct
There is cons about working overseas as well.
>> correct
You might face many difficulties.
>> correct
You might be discriminated and treated as an alien.
>> correct
Your safety could be at risk depending on where you stay.
>> correct
Local food cannot fit you.
>> correct
When you work in a city where hygiene or sanitation is poor, you might suffer from a health issue seriously because you cannot get a proper treatment when you get sick.
>> correct
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