Would you go and line up in a long queue just to watch a movie? Why or why not?
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Actually, It\'s been almost 10 years since I watched a movie in the theater. When I was dating with my wife, we used to go to the movie theater. Whenever we were there, I always fell a sleep while I was watching a movie regardless of genres. I could not stand for falling a sleep in the dark environments. That\'s why my wife doesn\'t to go the cinema with me. I don\'t like going to the cinema and really hate lining up in a long queue. Especially, I don\'t like going to somewhere are crowded. I have too many reason not to go the movie theater.
First, the ticket price is getting increased and snacks which I can buy in the cinema are too expensive. Secondly, I have children need to be cared. I can\'t bring them to the cinema because they can\'t watch a movie without making a noise. Lastly, as I told above, I really hate lining up in a long queue even though it is exciting rides in the amusement park.
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Hello Mr. [이름] ,
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Would you go and line up in a long queue just to watch a movie? Why or why not?
Actually, It\'s been almost 10 years since I watched a movie in the theater.
>>> CORRECT
When I was dating with my wife, we used to go to the movie theater.
>>> CORRECT
Whenever we were there, I always fell a sleep while I was watching a movie regardless of genres.
>>> Whenever we were there, I always fell asleep while I was watching a movie regardless of the genres.
I could not stand for falling a sleep in the dark environments.
>>> I could easily fall asleep in dark environments like theaters.
That\'s why my wife doesn\'t to go the cinema with me.
>>> That\'s why my wife doesn\'t want to go to the cinema with me.
I don\'t like going to the cinema and really hate lining up in a long queue.
>>> CORRECT
Especially, I don\'t like going to somewhere are crowded.
>>> Most especially, I don\'t like going to crowded places.
I have too many reason not to go the movie theater.
>>> I have too many reason not to go to the movie theater.
First, the ticket price is getting increased and snacks which I can buy in the cinema are too expensive.
>>> First, the tickets are getting expensive and the snacks in the cinemas are too expensive as well.
Secondly, I have children need to be cared.
>>> Second, I have children that I need to take care.
I can\'t bring them to the cinema because they can\'t watch a movie without making a noise.
>>> CORRECT
Lastly, as I told above, I really hate lining up in a long queue even though it is exciting rides in the amusement park.
>>> Lastly, as what I told earlier, I really hate lining up in a long queue even if it\'s an exciting ride in an amusement park.
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