Would you like life and the world to be more silent? Why or why not?
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No, not really. I want my life to be more dynamic and the world is same as well. When my life or the world are dynamic, I can realize how precious the silent is. On the other hands, as long as my life or the world are silent, probably I wish that my life or the world to be more dynamic. In other words, the silent or the dynamic life or the world can\'t exist to together then my choice will be the dynamic life and the dynamic world. Eventually, we are all die one day and after life, there will be no dynamic what so ever, isn\'t it? So, I would like life and the world to be more dynamic while I\'m in this life.
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I want my life to be more dynamic and the world is same as well.
>>>I want my life to be more dynamic and the world is the same as well.
When my life or the world are dynamic, I can realize how precious the silent is.
>>>When my life or the world is dynamic, I can realize how precious silence is.
On the other hands, as long as my life or the world are silent, probably I wish that my life or the world to be more dynamic.
>>>On the other hand, as long as my life or the world is silent, I probably wish that my life or the world would be more dynamic.
In other words, the silent or the dynamic life or the world can\'t exist to together then my choice will be the dynamic life and the dynamic world.
>>>In other words, if silence, the dynamic life or the world couldn\'t exist together, then my choice would be the dynamic life and the dynamic world.
Eventually, we are all die one day and after life, there will be no dynamic what so ever, isn\'t it?
>>>Eventually, we are all going to die one day and after life, there will be no dynamic or whatsoever, isn\'t it?
So, I would like life and the world to be more dynamic while I\'m in this life.
>>>So, I would like my life and the world to be more dynamic while I\'m still alive.
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