Would you like to be a farmer or fisherman? (explain your answer)
학생이 쓴 원문
I would like to be a farmer rather than a fisherman. The biggest difference between two jobs is the work place of them. A fisherman usually works in the sea and a farmer works in a field. Therefore, I prefer field to sea because walk on my foot. To be a fisherman and go out for fishing, I have to ride a boat. However, boat is expensive and it excessively depends on the weather. Also, I have to be used to touch live fish which is quite gross and scary. On the other hand, farmer can only smell fresh air co[이름]g out of the tree and nature. Farmers can plant different kinds of seeds every year to be refreshed and break the monotony. Even though far[이름]g can be disturbed by abnormal climate like heavy rain and heat wave, artificial protection like vinyl greenhouse can be one of the solutions. Like this, I think farmer has more benefits than fisherman.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름] Ji!~
I had a good time in class today. ^^
Thank you for sharing your thoughts!
I am also impressed at the amount of knowledge and concern you have for the environment, as well as the people who work in places related to nature itself.
See you next time!
~t. Ally
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I would like to be a farmer rather than a fisherman.
>> CORRECT!
The biggest difference between two jobs is the work place of them.
>> The biggest difference between the two jobs is the workplace.
A fisherman usually works in the sea and a farmer works in a field.
>> CORRECT!
Therefore, I prefer field to sea because walk on my foot.
>> Therefore, I prefer working in the field instead of the sea because, at least, I can walk on the ground.
To be a fisherman and go out for fishing, I have to ride a boat.
>> CORRECT!
However, boat is expensive and it excessively depends on the weather.
>> However, a boat is expensive, and it excessively depends on the weather.
Also, I have to be used to touch live fish which is quite gross and scary.
>> CORRECT!
On the other hand, farmer can only smell fresh air co[이름]g out of the tree and nature.
>> On the other hand, a farmer can smell fresh air from the trees and nature itself.
Farmers can plant different kinds of seeds every year to be refreshed and break the monotony.
>> CORRECT!
Even though far[이름]g can be disturbed by abnormal climate like heavy rain and heat wave, artificial protection like vinyl greenhouse can be one of the solutions.
>> Even though far[이름]g can be disturbed by abnormal climate like heavy rains and heat waves, artificial protection like vinyl greenhouses can be one of the solutions.
Like this, I think farmer has more benefits than fisherman.
>> Upon comparison, I think farmers have more benefits than fishermen.
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