Would you like to be famous? Why?

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Everyone must have thought about being famous.

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Some are eager for being famous and some are not.

>> Some are eager to be famous while some are not.

I think it would be good to be famous.

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Now, I\'ll let you know why I would like to be famous.

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First, when I\'m on the street, many people recognize me.

>> First, when I\'m on the street, many people will recognize me.

I don\'t know why I would like to be famous because of this reason but I think I\'ll be just happy if many people recognize me.

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Second, I don\'t have any moments to be alone.

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OR>> Second, I will always be surrounded by people.

I really like to be popular.

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Therefore, I like to have many friends, too.

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But these days, I have some problems in the relationship with some friends.

>> However, these days, I have some problems regarding my relationship with some friends.

So if I am famous, I will be surrounded with many people so I must be happy.

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For these reasons, I would like to be famous.

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But on the other side, famous people can\'t keep their privacy and it\'s really difficult to be famous.

>> On the other hand, famous people can\'t keep their privacy and so it\'s really difficult to be famous.

So I think it\'s good if someone gives me the famous for free but it isn\'t that worthy to try hard to be famous.

>> In conclusion, I think it\'s good if someone gives me fame for free but it isn\'t that worth it to try hard to be famous.