Would you like to have a casino in your town? What would be the advantages and disadvantages?

2019-09-05 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

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If my town have a casino, I\'ll so excited. it is very fun and feel thrill because of using own money. however, one of the person, may be loss many money. So, casino games are dangerous for addiction. I think that the casino games are using a few money. then the casino can limit the amount, many people will be fun to games.

강사 첨삭

Hey there, Clara. Great job coming up with a good solution on having casinos in your city while having fun. That is quite a good solution. Maybe, you can pitch it to your city mayor sometime^^ I\'ll talk to you again in class. Great job, keep it up! ~ teacher Jane c\", 

If my town have a casino, I\'ll so excited. 
>>> If my town has a casino, I will get so excited. 

it is very fun and feel thrill because of using own money. 
>>> There is fun and thrill in using one\'s own money. 

however, one of the person, may be loss many money. 
>>> However, a person may lose much money. 

So, casino games are dangerous for addiction. 
>>> So casino games are dangerous and may lead to addiction. 

I think that the casino games are using a few money. 
>>> I think we should only spend a small amount of money on casino games. 

then the casino can limit the amount, many people will be fun to games.
>>> If the casinos can limit the amount spent, many people will have fun playing the games. 

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