Would you like to travel into space? Why or why not? What do you think about space tourism?
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It would be really amazing if I could travel into space. I cannot imagine how I feel when I see the beautiful earth over the sky, and I explore some strange planets that have completely different environment with my home. However, this dream might be going to never happen in a few decades from now. Moreover, I would put it off, even though a entrepreneur launches this service with a quite reasonable price.
This is the reason that there are a lot of tremendous places, where I have not ever been, on our planet. Additionally, the space travel should be really expensive and dangerous though many scientists overcome lots of technical problems of it. I do not want to use a bunch of money and take a risk only for per se ‘extraordinary experience’. I rather deserve other values that I can do on the ground.
I might want to go out of the earth after about a century, if I still alive.
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Here are the corrections.
It would be really amazing if I could travel into space. I cannot imagine how I feel when I see the beautiful earth over the sky, and I explore some strange planets that have completely different environment with my home.
>>Correct!
However, this dream might be going to never happen in a few decades from now. Moreover, I would put it off, even though a entrepreneur launches this service with a quite reasonable price.
>>However, this dream might never happen in few decades from now. Moreover, I would put it off, even though an entrepreneur launches this service with a quite reasonable price.
This is the reason that there are a lot of tremendous places, where I have not ever been, on our planet. Additionally, the space travel should be really expensive and dangerous though many scientists overcome lots of technical problems of it.
>>Correct!
I do not want to use a bunch of money and take a risk only for per se ‘extraordinary experience’. I rather deserve other values that I can do on the ground.
>>I do not want to use a bunch of money and take a risk only for an ‘extraordinary experience’. I rather deserve other values that I can do on the ground.
I might want to go out of the earth after about a century, if I still alive.
>>I might want to go out of the earth after about a century, if I\'m still alive.
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