Would you like to travel into space? Why or why not? What do you think about space tourism?
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I want to go to space because it is special experience.
It is difficult to go there because it is too far.
We have to board a spaceship to go to space but, it need a lot of money.
And also we have to train many things like resisting against gravity.
Because of this reasons, only a few persons had gone there.
So, I want to travel into space to do special experience.
If I go to space, it is very exciting. I can see many planets like the Earth which have watched in pictures and imagined only.
So, I want to develop technique of space exploration rapidly and I hope that we can go to space easily.
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I want to go to space because it is special experience.
>>I want to go to space because it is a special experience.
It is difficult to go there because it is too far. We have to board a spaceship to go to space but, it need a lot of money.
>>It is difficult to go there because it is too far. We have to board a spaceship to go to space and, it needs a lot of money.
And also we have to train many things like resisting against gravity. Because of this reasons, only a few persons had gone there.
>>And also, we have to be trained with many things like resisting against gravity. Because of this reasons, only few people had gone there.
So, I want to travel into space to do special experience. If I go to space, it is very exciting. I can see many planets like the Earth which have watched in pictures and imagined only.
>>So, I want to travel into space to do special experiences. If I go to space, it is very exciting. I can see many planets like the Earth, which I watched in pictures and imagined only.
So, I want to develop technique of space exploration rapidly and I hope that we can go to space easily.
So, I want to develop technique of space exploration rapidly and I hope that we can go to space easily.
>>So, I want to develop techniques of space exploration rapidly and I hope that we can go there easily.
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